Ok so I feel like my introductory paragraph is kind of every where and has a lot of ideas but they do not tie in like i want them too so if anyone has any suggestions feel free to leave me some comments, any help is good help. Thanks :)
Have you ever felt invisible to the world or wanted to be invisible? We all have those moments when we feel outcasted by the rest of the group or we wish we could be anywhere but at that particular place. There are also the times when we wish we could be invisible. The television series Buffy the Vampire Slayer uses a lot of metaphors to connect their viewers to the show. By using this technique, the viewers can relate to what is happening in the episodes and therefore be more interested and more likely to watch others. Even though it is a science fiction television show, they use real life situations that everyday high schoolers go through. In the episode “Out of Sight, Out of Mind” a girl named Marcie becomes invisible because she is so ignored to her peers that she actually physically becomes invisible. Obviously this was not her choice. Now she is going to be invisible for the rest of her life from what the episode suggested. I mean, not much changed because she was so ignored, but was it better for her to be visible still and ignored, or is it better to actually be invisible?
I think this was well written. My only criticism is in he beginning I didn't know if the paper was headed toward people not being accepted, or actually being invisible. It was a bit confusing to me at first. It was almost like the paper was pulling toward two different topics, but at the end it came together well to establish one clear topic, so all in all, it was well written in my opinion.
ReplyDeleteI think you are comparing the feeling with the actual happening. I think that is interesting, but it took me a while. Maybe you could mention that in your first sentence and the rest would flow, I don't know though. I like your ideas a lot.
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